[Internal-cg] Combined proposal executive summary and public comment material

Paul Wilson pwilson at apnic.net
Fri Jun 19 21:56:57 UTC 2015

Dear all,

I couldn’t fully follow the discussion yesterday about this document.  
I could not hear well, but I’ve reviewed the transcript to try to 
understand the positions of ICG members.

This is a useful start, but I’ve put some thought today into the 
overall structure which address some of the concerns i heard yesterday.  
I do think we should be clear on this structure and purpose before going 
too far into the content (although this first draft will be useful I’m 

So here is a proposed structure, below, with a brief description of the 
purpose and content of each section.

I think it may be easier to discuss this separately from proposed 
content;  once agreed the content can start to be filled in.

I hope this is useful.


1. Executive Summary

This is a substantial summary of the proposal itself and the ICG 
Description of ICG’s own processes should be brief.
No background material is included here, except by reference.

2. Development Process

This is a full description of the ICG’s own process to develop the 
Community proposal processes not described here as they are covered in 
the next section.
Should include very limited pre-ICG background material, except by 

3. Community Proposals Overview

This section has 3 sub-sections, for Protocols, Numbers and Names.
Each part gives a summary of the community proposal, with consistent 
structure of subsections:
- Development process
- List and brief functional description of main components of proposal
- Summary of ICG evaluation

4. Integrated Transition Proposal

This is the full substance of the proposal as an integration of 
community proposals.
Individual detail sections will cover all of the proposal elements:
- common elements including PTI, IANA Intellectual property, etc
- major elements from individual proposals, with IGC’s own commentary 
on each

5. Integrated proposal assessment

This is the substance of the proposal assessment by the ICG, including:
- Interactions between community proposals
- Assessment of NTIA Requirements
- Accountability considerations?
- Implementation considerations and timing

6. Conclusion and next steps

This provides next steps with reference to NTIA assessment and 
implementation steps.
Process issues e.g. regarding management/oversight of implementation.
Recommendations from the ICG, if any.
Should not cover process for comment on this document, because that is 
out of band.

Paul Wilson, Director-General, APNIC                        dg at apnic.net
http://www.apnic.net                                            @apnicdg

On 18 Jun 2015, at 4:21, Alissa Cooper wrote:

> Hi all,
> I’ve put together a skeleton of an executive summary for the 
> combined transition proposal. I put it into the combined proposal 
> document so folks can see it in context. Essentially all of the words 
> in the executive summary are directly copied from existing documents 
> (NTIA announcement, ICANN site about the creation of the ICG, our 
> proposal finalization process), with some minor modifications for 
> style. Anything in angle brackets (< >) still needs to be filled in. 
> The summaries of the individual proposal components could be filled in 
> now. The other pieces can’t be filled in until we do our assessment 
> of the proposal. This has been shared with the small drafting team but 
> I wanted to get it out to the whole group since we will discuss it at 
> least a bit tomorrow.
> I’ve also started putting together an outline of the materials we 
> may need to have on our web site when we launch the public comment 
> process on the combined proposal. I’ve included that as well since 
> we’ve had the recent discussion on the mailing list and the last 
> call about some of this content. The attached version reflects some 
> comments from the drafting team (Milton in particular). In general 
> I’ve tried to follow the approach Daniel recommended: keep the 
> executive summary in the proposal document itself somewhat brief, and 
> put the extra background material that public commenters may need on 
> the web site. I didn’t actually draft the background section yet 
> though — volunteer(s) to draft that would be great. The web site 
> document also contains an initial list of questions to the public, 
> drawn from our proposal assessment process and the NTIA criteria.
> We’ll have time for discussion of the direction of these at the F2F. 
> Secretariat: please add these documents to the Dropbox.
> Alissa
> [combined-proposal-v1.doc]
> [public-comment-web-page-v1.docx]
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Paul Wilson, Director-General, APNIC                        dg at apnic.net
http://www.apnic.net                                            @apnicdg

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